Monday, November 9, 2009

Ball

Hi hi hi I’m ttt-hh-e bball I am also always am existed when the children come out to play because I know that they are going to play with me I am their favorite toy. Oh look here they come now weeeeeee i`m flying I love it when they kick me one way and then back the other. You for all you other balls that haven’t you should try this its like your flying like superball
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4 comments:

  1. Wonderful WaldoNovember 18, 2009 at 2:23 PM

    FUNNY but I would maybe suggest add more detail in it....

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  2. book sweetNovember 24, 2009 at 11:05 AM

    I think the story was funny, but you should have put a bit more detail in it

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  3. Random bananaNovember 24, 2009 at 11:09 AM

    you use run on senteces and need to work on your spelling. But i like how u said u loved when children came to play. But u should have not told us what u were feeling and expressed it to us.

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  4. Pie Freak!November 24, 2009 at 11:10 AM

    Funny how the words dragged on because the ball was bouncing. I think you should write some more details in the story.

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